Wednesday, November 26, 2008

New kid with a story

Hi! I decided to join in order to post and receive comments on this new story I just started working on. It's a work in progress, and I'd really appreciate your honest feedback. Feel free to tell me what you liked, what you didn't like, what you'd love to see happen next, etc. THANKS!

So here it is, and keep in mind that this isn't the beginning of the story. I wasn't all too sure on how I'd go about starting my story, so I just started with writing out the scene I knew I'd include.

OK, here it is:

It had happened all too quickly.

Too engrossed in her reading, Celeste failed to notice the red Mercedes speeding her way. It wasn’t until the honking of the driver’s horn, catching her attention, did she finally lift her face from the pages of her book.

Suddenly aware of her seemingly inevitable demise, she stopped dead in tracks, paralyzed with fear, and eyes impossibly wide.

The book that had left her spellbound just seconds ago was now the last thing on her mind as it slipped from her grasp, hitting asphalt.

Legs unmoving, she accepted her fate. With eyes squeezed tightly shut, she waited for the painful impact she knew was to come.

It never came.

Seconds passed, but that expected gut-wrenching pain never occurred. Her fear soon shaped into an overwhelming curiosity, so slowly she opened her eyes, and there stood before her, the figure of a man.

1 comment:

Mita said...

Good job :).I liked this one, so you should definitely finish it.